2nd Draft Script

Potential titles for my radio play

• The Sub-Prime Minister
• The Un-Prime Minister
• The Prime Morrister
• Past his prime
• The Un-prime Example

I have chosen The Prime Morrister as a name. This is a good 'play on words' with the name of the central character. I can also use 'Prime Morrister' as a nickname that the public give him out of affection towards the end of the play.

Evaluation of my 1st draft script

Advantages:

• It has a clear narrative structure i.e. equilibrium (unpopular Prime Minister), action (PM goes on a tour) and new equilibrium (refreshed, more popular, PM)
• It has a good 'cliff hanger' (the PM calling a general election). This also means other episodes could be made, making it into a series
• There are some funny bits. My personal favourites being the weather forecast and the mobility scooter race
• There is good use of sound effects and location sounds; I've tried to create an 'imaginary world' and hope this will translate into the production
• The Prime Minister, Morris Lloyd-Jones, shows his humanity and emotion when seeing himself being mocked on the television, making the audience (hopefully) feel sympathetic towards him
• Continuity is good. I have tried to make each change of scene a 'leap' in time, with a fade in at the beginning and fade out at the end of each scene

To be improved:

• In general, I need to re-visit each section of dialogue to ensure it is natural. This is one of the most difficult aspects if writing a radio play and why I have drafted a script
• Some jokes need to be altered or perhaps even removed (e.g. the joke about it always raining in Scotland)
• A scene, or maybe even several, may need to be cut (Maybe scenes 2 & 3?). The reasons for this are twofold. Firstly, my play in its current form I think is over my five minute time limit. Secondly, I feel that the beginning of my play is too long before the 'action' of the tour begins
• In my opinion, the quality of the writing gets better throughout - a by-product of improving my script writing skills with more experience. This needs to be solved.

1st Draft Script

Other Characters

 

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2nd Focus Group Meeting

Video Diary 5

Ancillary Tasks

Whilst I am currently writing my script for the main task, I am starting to plan my Ancillary Tasks. The two tasks I have chosen are:

A double-page listings magazine feature about the play (10 marks)

"The candidate is expected to demonstrate excellence in the creative use of most of the following technical skills:

• awareness of conventions of layout and page design
• awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size
• accurate use of language and register
• the appropriate use of ICT for the task set
• appropriate integration of illustration and text
• framing a shot, using a variety of shot distances as appropriate
• shooting material appropriate to the task set; selecting mise-en-scène including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting
• manipulating photographs as appropriate, including cropping and resizing."

A page from the radio station’s website promoting the play (10 marks)

"There is evidence of proficiency in the creative use of many of the following technical skills:

• producing material so that it communicates clearly to the ‘reader’ and is appropriate to the audience, using the conventions of web publishing to enable the ‘reader’ to navigate the material appropriately;
• using ICT effectively to appropriately integrate images, written text, sound and video;
• using conventions of image, video and sound production appropriately and effectively;
• accurately using language and register, showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size."