I am currently working on improving my script line-by-line (My second draft can be viewed here).
One thing I feel my script is currently lacking in is a 'subplot'. A subplot is an additional storyline that goes alongside the main plot.
I think a subplot could be included where the Prime Minister's assistant's phone keeps going off, receiving updates about what members of the cabinet are doing by text. This would also make my radio play more realistic because the Prime Minister would still have to deal with problems back at Westminster whilst on tour.
I agree it might make it more realistic, however, as you are trying to write a five minute intro to a series, it is probably best to keep it a single narrative for reasons of clarity.
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